Home Learning and Spellings 20.01.12
20 Jan 2012 36 Comments
Your home learning this week is to have a go at the 100 Word Challenge. You have to write a piece of writing, using this photo, in under 100 words. If you are able to, then type your piece of writing as a comment on this blog post and I will publish it for everyone to read and comment on.
Also, here are your spellings for your test on Friday.
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zh
Jan 21, 2012 @ 10:25:23
dear mrs.beckwith
The giant bee
A bee is a very loud insect.Giant bee’s look scary.If you annoy them to much then you will get a painful sting.Bee’s collect pollen to make honey.Then the bee keepers collect it and sell it.That is how we get honey!!! Bee’s have wIngs witch help them fly.This bee is not like other giant bee’s and is quite special.Instead of making honey it makes chocolate!!
from zantiaxxx
badgerclass
Jan 21, 2012 @ 18:00:55
Great piece of writing Zantia. It sound almost like a piece of non-fiction information. Well done for using adjectives, different sentence starters and exclamation marks. Could you try to write a story about it?
ellen
Jan 21, 2012 @ 11:03:10
The Giant Bee
The huge bumble bee is standing on the path way .Its massive body is black .He has a yellow,black and white furry back.You can see six, skinny, long and hairy legs. Wings on his back are see through, you can see his veins.Enormous shiny, black eyes each side of his head. Awesome antennae move swiftly in the wind. White honey caves shine behind him. Hexagon honey combs waiting to be filled with delicious honey.His job is to find sunflowers, to collect the nectar. Buzz, buzz the amazing wings beat hard and giant bee takes off like a helicopter.
badgerclass
Jan 21, 2012 @ 18:05:16
What a beautiful piece of writing Ellen. You have used some amazing adjectives to really describe the bee and I especially love your simile at the end where you compare the bee with a helicopter. Well done for using commas in lists of your adjectives and for trying to start your sentences in different ways. Where could you add more connectives?
Stanley Hughes
Jan 21, 2012 @ 12:06:28
Fly said” coming, ready or not!” tim the tiny horse and fly were playing a game of hide an seek at the eden centre.They had tried to get entry but fly was refused on the grounds that he may contaminate the ocotic fly species in ranforest part.So not to be too disapointed about their day out they were playing a game.
after 48 seconds of playing fly got bored which is a long time in fly’s lifes span.So they decided to go home and have a cup of tea and watch anna ford on the teevision.
badgerclass
Jan 21, 2012 @ 18:09:53
What a unique piece of writing Stanley-did you have some help?. I am really impressed with the way that you have used speech, connectives and different sentence starters-well done. Remember to use capital letters for names and some adjectives.
ollie tookey
Jan 21, 2012 @ 17:43:19
hi badgers i love you all from ollie tookey
badgerclass
Jan 21, 2012 @ 18:12:44
Hello Ollie,
It’s so lovely to hear from you. How are you getting on in your new school? Some of the Badgers were looking at some Maths photos with you in the other day and Lewis mentioned that he’d seen you in Lewes, so you have never been far from our thoughts.
Please keep us updated with how you are.
With love from all of Badger Class x
lil
Jan 22, 2012 @ 16:11:59
dear Mrs Becwith
this is not about our Homework but i made a cake at the weekend am i allowed to bring it in on Monday
lily r.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:22:51
Thank you for your lovely cake. Sorry I didn’t see this message earlier. Feel free to make as many cakes as you like!!!
etp horse lover
Jan 22, 2012 @ 17:10:38
Hi, my name is sienna, special agent number 2004 . I am going to Join forces with the bees to defeat the enemy wasps because they are evil !! Our plan is to build a buzzernator to fight the wicked wasps and keep the brave buzzy bees safe. we want to keep the bees safe because they give us honey which is yummy !! with out the bees we would not have any food and we would die. The buzzernator looks like a baby bee and it has a button on it’s bum which sends out a powerful sting and we can save the bees.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:26:09
What an exciting story Sienna; you clearly have put your imagination to great use! Well done for including exclamation marks to add to the excitement, and for including connectives and some different sentence openers. Try to include more adjective to help describe things in your story.
sienna
Jan 22, 2012 @ 17:13:56
sorry about putting eloises name on it its just because she has a wordpress acount and it was logged in so it came up with her user name sorry
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:23:45
That’s fine Sienna, don’t worry. I don’t mind how you get your comment on the blog, as long as I know it’s you!!
lewis
Jan 23, 2012 @ 17:29:14
WHAT A MASSIVE WASP !!!!
standing there all made out of craft pieces, cane for his body covered in black tissue paper .His long spikey blackpipped legs with metal looking pincers on the end .He has a large black fur head with two large wholes for eyes and a long antenia either side of his head . Yellow and black fur travelling down his oval back,
his body in two bubbles of flesh,his tail all white and fluffy.The most impressive part of his body are his transparent wings thick yellowy plastic with black metal rods for veins .He looks like a watering feature for the gardens surrounding him and the garden bubbles behind him look like his nest.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:29:10
Excellent description of the bee Lewis. Well done for using some great adjectives, connectives and sentence openers. You can really imagine what the bee looks like, without having to see the photo at all. Try to include a greater range of punctuation in the appropriate places.
lo
Jan 23, 2012 @ 18:14:34
BERTIE THE GIANT BEE
Not that long ago there was a bee. Not just any old bee but a giant bee. Everyone was frightened of him but all he wanted to do was to make friends and buzz around happily. Bertie was fed up of being all alone so he decided to show he was friendly and buzzed over to where some children were having a picnic. When Bertie got there they ran away so Bertie hovered over the picnic blanket and dropped sweets which he had under his wings. The children saw he was friendly and came over to play Bertie was happy.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:31:37
What a great piece of writing Luke! I am so pleased that your story had a happy ending; I was feeling very sorry for him at the beginning! Well done for using a great range of connectives, sentence openers and different length sentences. Try to include some different punctuation, including exclamation marks and commas.
ruby
Jan 24, 2012 @ 16:21:11
A few months ago my family and I went to visit the Eden Project. When we arrived at the gate of the Eden Project we met up with some of our friends. While the parents were chatting Jack and I spotted something. We weren’t sure what it was until somebody shouted out “Help there’s a giant bumble bee in the middle of the path!” Suddenly Jack and I rushed up to the parents and said “Mum, there’s a giant bumble bee on the path, we have to go”. Then I looked up and saw a swam of giant bumble bees heading our way, ready for landing. Then my parents realised I was telling the truth, there were bumble bees and they weren’t just on the path, they were everywhere. The buzzing noise was so loud like thousands of helicopters. A man shouted out “Go and hide, quick”. My family and I ran to hide behind the hedge. I closed my eyes tight and waited and waited. After a long time, the buzzing had stopped, so I slowly opened my eyes. The bees had gone. Everything was back to normal. Finally my family and I got to enjoy our day out.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:21:42
Excellent story Ruby-have you actually been to the Eden Project and seen the bee? Well done for using a range of connectives and sentence openers and for including some speech. I really like your simile where you compare the sound of the bees to helicopters! Try to include further adjectives next time.
Martha
Jan 24, 2012 @ 17:22:11
I think the bumble bee could be called Fred because he looks friendlyand he looks like he is the size of an elephant. He looks like he took ages to make and I think the fur could be made of petals from a flower. I think the body could be made of wire and the wings made of paper. The giant domes look like huge bubbles. The body looks like a paper-mache model and it looks like it has lights in it.
I think Fred the bumbe bee should have a girlfriend.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:19:21
Excellent description of the bee and his surroundings. I really like how you have compared the bee to other things that you have already seen as this really brings your description to life. Try adding in different connectives, including at the start of sentences.
Lily Hills
Jan 24, 2012 @ 20:15:36
100 Word Challenge
Once there lived a huge bug. He’s very big and he has a famliy, a mum & Dad and sister. And he was the biggest in the famliy.
One day he flew away from his home & famliy,& Then the mum was very VERY angry.But he only wanted to play with his Best friend. And his friend is the biggest in his famliy too! And they played & played but then mum & dad came and told them off for flying away from home without asking first.
So we all flew home together to our safe beehive.
The end.
By Lily Hills 99 words!!
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:15:58
Great story Lily, which makes you want to read on. I especially like your use of connectives and the different pieces of punctuation that you have included. Try to add in some more adjectives next time.
Ethan h
Jan 25, 2012 @ 08:03:49
The Giant Bee by Ethan Haddock
Once upon a time there was a magnificent giant, he looked fierce and his muscles looked like boulders. Even though he looked fierce, he was a kind giant. He did like stealing honey from bees, until one day the bees all stung him. Their sting was like red hot needles, he ran to his cottage. Later on the giant turned into a giant bee. A few days later he had destroyed the city. A very clever mechanical man made a machine and turned the giant back into his old self.
THE END.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:12:50
What a fantastic piece of writing Ethan. You have included lots of adjectives and similes, as well as a range of different connectives and sentence openers; well done! Try to include some exclamation marks for exciting sentences.
Bow Bridger
Jan 25, 2012 @ 16:55:13
Me and Berty the bumblebee where playing a game of it, back and forth we went all day. Then we got tired and sat down for a rest, we got bored so we went home and had some hot chocolate. We put on our pjarmos, sat down in our beds and put our heads down and fell asleep. Berty the bumblebee crept up in the morning and woke me up for breakfast. We went outside again and played another game of it. Then it started snowing we where so surprised, we said “horay” and jumped up and down.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:10:39
Great piece of writing Bow. You have used lots of different connectives and you have started your sentences in different ways. Well done for also including some speech marks. Try to include more adjectives to describe the bee.
harvey
Jan 25, 2012 @ 18:31:03
hello mrs beckwith,
the bee looks really cool he is so big , i love his colours yellow and black.
he looks a bit mean with his nasty sting, i wouldnt want him to get me.
i think it would be real fun to ride on his back and fly up high over all the houses and people, wizzing around the world. he looks like if you touch him he may feel soft. bees collect pollen from flowers which make honey i love honey it tastes really nice on bread so thankyou bee. they only sting you if you upset them but then they die which is a bit sad for them.
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:08:11
Well done for using so many adjectives to really describe the bee Harvey. You have included lots of information about what he looks and feels like and what he does. Try to include some different connectives.
Rohana Parsons (Badgers)
Jan 25, 2012 @ 19:23:36
To Miss Beckwith
The bee looks a little scary to me because it seems very big compared to the buildings behind. I don’t know why it has a hole for the eyes, but I feel like climbing inside them although it sounds a bit gory.I think it might have a frame made of bent willow with paper glued over it – in the same way that the Year sixes made their parade animals last year. It might get a bit wet if it rains, but I guess they could put a cover over it.
By Rohana Parsons
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:05:55
Well done Rohana. You have looked at the bee really carefully and have described it in a great amount of detail. Well done for using lots of connectives too. Perhaps try to write a story next time.
Lil
Jan 26, 2012 @ 08:23:31
The Bee and the Flower
There was once a bee named bumble. One day bumble landed on a flower “ooh!” shrieked the flower “someone has just landed on my nose!” “Sorry,” Replied bumble. “That’s ok.” sighed the flower, whose real name was pollen. I think I should just take what I have and give to the Queen “ok bye!” shouted pollen “”her Queen this is all have,” sighed bumble “that’s ok.” Replied the Queen softly then bumble went outside and got all the pollen he could get and brought it all back to the Queen and they managed to make lots of yummy yummy honey!!!!!!
Lily R
badgerclass
Jan 27, 2012 @ 18:03:36
Great story Lily. Well done for included speech, which we looked at the other week, and for using lots of different pieces of punctuation. Try to include more adjectives and connectives.
JP
Jan 29, 2012 @ 16:53:17
In the picture I see an enormous Bee, I think the bee could be bigger than a car. Because it’s wider than the car track that it has landed on. It’s colour is mainly black, it looks like it could be made of a willow framework wrapped in bin liners. The fur looks like spray painted grass and the wings look like glass covered branches. In the background is a greenhouse made of hexagons which looks like a honeycomb. The weather looks cloudy because there are no shadows.
badgerclass
Jan 29, 2012 @ 18:22:17
Lovely piece of writing Jensen. You have described the bee beautifully using some really great similes. Well done for using some connectives too. Try to start some more sentences in different ways.